Today We "HOOKED" Our Readers!

We were learning about starting a story with a good beginning:

Here's a sample of our finest - we revised the sentence:

One day I went to the pool.

Ethan: Bump. "Are we there yet?" I said, yelling from the car.

Nicolas revised his own story's beginning:

It was: One day we were at Disneyland.

He changed it to: "Are we there yet? HOORAY! We're here!" I shouted. We were at Disneyland.

Aidan B. created a new story and knew to put in some details and have someone talking to start his piece:

"Let's go to that house," I said. I pointed to a house that had a broken window. We were trick or treating and it was the last house of the night. We went to ring the doorbell, but the door was ripped off and we could see inside.

Here's Ryan's revision of: One sunny day I played with my friend: "Are you ready to play Ryan?" said a voice from upstairs.

They are finding that good beginnings are what get the reader excited to read. They look at the beginnings of chapters they are reading for ideas.

FABULOUS!